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Last Time in Strawberry Fields by ~TheMangoCritic:iconTheMangoCritic:





Under the shield of autumn gold leaves, she sang, knees
swaying. Sing for John, she told us. Sing for everyone.
Her purple shrouded arms waved, joining her knees

as though her dance alone would cure the country.
The candle's for you, she told a man beside her. From John.
She said she had a home, but we wondered where

and how. Her daily arrangement, when she arrived,
was laid around the circle, roses plump and crisp,
the candle blown out only when the park lamps lighted

at night. She told us of the police and her battle to keep John's
flowers from being swept away, of the dogs not on leashes
and the homeless man's harassments.

She cheered her hand radio, the firemen
refusing to leave. And she said to us, when the towers
fell, as though her roses compared to lives,
Welcome to my world, World.
©2006-2009 ~TheMangoCritic
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full title... Our Last time In Strawberry Fields .... it just doesnt have the same effect without the "Our"... but it just didn't fit.

Okay, I'm going out on a fragile little limb by submitting this. Read it quick(!) before I become self-conscious and delete it.

I wrote this about 6 months after 9/11. Based on a woman I met at the Lennon Memorial.

(photo by me)

Daily Deviation

Given 2006-04-25

The fact this poem was inspired by events surrounding 9/11 is irrelevant; this is a timeless poem. Somehow hidden behind this scene is hope. Please take a moment out of your day to read Last Time in Strawberry Fields by =TheMangoCritic. (Featured by `imperfect)

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:iconimperfect:
This is a wonderful poem. Very well crafted and not overly sentimental. You control the poem well and both your line and stanza breaks work perfectly.

Please don't take it down.

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My first comment on my first posted poem, and its from the notorious ^imperfect. Thanks! :blushes:
:iconomnidevil:
Amazing, I would not have even missed this, if I hadn't seen or read this, I would have been ashamed, this is great, the meaning, wonderful and deep.

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:iconsorrowisapanther:
This kind of makes me ache inside. Not in a bad way. I like poems that make me feel something.

Well-deserved.

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:iconhollowground:
damn!!! that was beautiful!!! :clap:....congrats on the DD!!! :)

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Well-deserved DD. One of the few poems I really, really, really like.

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Congrats on the DD! A lot of poems that are featured don't really deserve it, but it was definitely deserved in this case :clap:

~Tal

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This is absolutely beautiful and seems perfect to me in every way.
Congrats on the DD. :)

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Perfect!

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:icondiamondie:
Other people have used the word "beautiful", but I think this is even more powerful than beautiful. The piece has a great structure and narrative. It's a moment that almost feels like a dream, but very real at the same time. The only thing I didn't really like was the line "as though her dance alone would cure the country.", but I don't know how I'd change it.

You should definitely post more poetry!

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